Last week I wrote about having to go back and touch up the artwork I’ve done over the last year or so in an effort to make ‘Perfect World’ look a little better. I think I’m done with fixing the panels and the pages that bothered me or didn’t look good so I can finally move on.
The biggest chore in these revisions was redrawing an entire 5 page story that Brian Bastian wrote. It was a story titled “Scenes From An Italian Restaurant’ which was done for some anthology a few months back. Brian wrote the script and like usual, gave me a lot of freedom for the artwork. The script was just the dialogue and having the story take place in a restaurant.
So I did the story and I thought it was fine but I remember when I was working on it how boring it was to draw. Five pages of the same characters at the same restaurant. It was a chore to make the pages look different enough in order to make the story more interesting to draw and to read.
As I was going through the artwork for the book, I decided I needed to redraw the entire story. It looked rushed, it looked like I was bored. The script was good and the artwork wasn’t doing the story justice. But I didn’t want to redraw 5 pages of restaurant again. I looked at the script and decided I could have most of the story in a completely different setting and still stay true to the spirit of the story and keep the dialogue the same.
So I spent the last week redrawing it. I like it better.
Here’s the original:
And there you have it. I used some panels from the original story for the new story but I think it worked okay. I’m pretty happy with how this turned out. The story is more interesting to look at and I was happy to keep the dialogue and the spirit of the story intact.
Okay, now onto finishing up other stuff.